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#21185 - 01/17/11 08:36 AM Challenge for you
lori32wf lori32wf addict Registered: 11/18/02 Posts: 465 Loc: Louisiana	I know Maureen usually is the one who challenges us to write, but I wrote something this weekend and I'd like to see what others would write on the subject. Even though there aren't many of us left, I think it could be a little fun. They say writing is the best therapeutic tool. I have found this to be true many times in my own life. It allows you to get out emotions even you may not know you have. So, here's your subject. In your own genre write about something that is haunting, or has haunted, you. You'll never know how freeing it feels to get rid of the negative energy you hold on to until you release it to the world. I hope I haven't stepped on anyone's toes :-s. _________________________ I don't write my dreams or nightmares. I write my own reality.
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#21186 - 01/17/11 08:39 AM Re: Challenge for you [Re: lori32wf]
lori32wf lori32wf addict Registered: 11/18/02 Posts: 465 Loc: Louisiana	Here's mine. *Haunted by an Unborn Ghost* Once upon a time I imagined you loved me. Thought I lived in more than just your memories. Now those days are gone. Hope has flown the coop. Thing I wish for now is to know I won’t again be duped. I can’t believe how much I gave of myself to you. Don’t understand why you couldn’t do it too. The tears I’ve cried seem pointless and foolish. I was never anything more than a releasable fish. You were my entire world. I love you more than anyone before. Felt cherished, desired, and safe. Now understand the emotions of a whore. Used, abused, abandoned, and bruised. Those are my pals today. Friendship has replaced romance. Yet a smile is what’s on display. Life goes on. Love still lives inside. Trust is an issue. Secrets I now hide. My lungs expand. My heart beats. My mind stays confused. My soul surrenders defeat. You can’t stand the thought of someone else touching me. Yet, you’ve done much worse. Another branch is on your family tree. Someday this will be behind me. One day you won’t matter any more. Someone else may stand in your place. Forever I’ll close this painful door. I can’t breathe this stagnant air. I can’t walk down this desolate path. Loneliness and heartbreak are its obstacles. Makes me desire a long, hot bubble bath. Letting go is difficult to do. But, this survivor can’t allow parole. For you murdered us when you selfishly decided not to use any birth control. _________________________ I don't write my dreams or nightmares. I write my own reality.
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#21187 - 01/17/11 09:13 PM Re: Challenge for you [Re: lori32wf]
Sorcerer Sorcerer enthusiast Registered: 01/04/10 Posts: 215 Loc: United States of America.	Ghost Of Best Friends Past I wish and wonder if it would, have been diffrent if i hadn't said to much, should I remember who is is, my memories, such. But I don't remember one of past best friends, and I really don't want to make any amends, or remember what once was, this was not so long ago, scarred I was from past friends. This is a haunting, a choice I had then made, to tell him goodbye, and darkness enclosed my face, and I had told him very deep parts of me, he hasn't told a soul, so thankful I be. But I don't remember why I said, no more can friends we be, it tore apart my heart, I fell into deep depression, till death did I depart. So that is a haunting that i do find, but I forgot about him, but wish it had been a glide, that my life had been a sims. A story it once was, a simple fairytale, and now with scars, you know a deep, darke, memory. _________________________ I'll be back one day.
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#21188 - 01/17/11 09:20 PM Re: Challenge for you [Re: Sorcerer]
Sorcerer Sorcerer enthusiast Registered: 01/04/10 Posts: 215 Loc: United States of America.	This happened not long ago. I don't remember him except for his name, voice. I told him goodbye and I don't remember why. Forgetting is one of the things I do best. Even when I wish to remember. I made the decision to end our friendship. And that tore me apart because I had shared with him many secrates and a love for some things. We had been friends for 2 years. So that what was going on for when I disapeared that long time. _________________________ I'll be back one day.
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#21190 - 01/18/11 07:38 AM Re: Challenge for you [Re: Sorcerer]
lori32wf lori32wf addict Registered: 11/18/02 Posts: 465 Loc: Louisiana	Very nice, Sorcerer. Sometimes the best thing you can do is to forget. At least the bad parts LOL. _________________________ I don't write my dreams or nightmares. I write my own reality.
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#21191 - 01/18/11 09:29 PM Re: Challenge for you [Re: lori32wf]
Sorcerer Sorcerer enthusiast Registered: 01/04/10 Posts: 215 Loc: United States of America.	Ya. But sometimes I want to remember. And you're the first to get my poem right. Everyone, even my teacher thinks that there are hiden menings in poetry, and there are, but I tell you these things quite clearly and yet they never realize what I am saying. You are the very first to read it and know what is happining. Thank you! I was begining to put my poems into code just because no one could find my words to be as I wrote them. Thanks! _________________________ I'll be back one day.
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#21192 - 01/21/11 06:47 AM Re: Challenge for you [Re: Sorcerer]
lori32wf lori32wf addict Registered: 11/18/02 Posts: 465 Loc: Louisiana	There are hidden meanings in poetry. In any genre if you were to look. Even when you've put everything down on paper there's still things left unsaid. Take my poem for instance. I elude to the fact I keep secrets. There are things I can't say to the person I love. I'm veiled now by the cloak of friendship. In order to not risk the fragile ground I walk upon I hide the deeper side of myself. There's also something else hidden in my poem. It's anger. I have SO much anger inside of me because the man I love got someone else pregnant. Around my birthday no less. A birthday he promised to spend with me. People will ALWAYS take a written piece and make it into something they understand. No matter what you write about, if it's coded or not, they're going to relate it to themselves. That's a GOOD thing LOL. _________________________ I don't write my dreams or nightmares. I write my own reality.
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#21193 - 01/21/11 07:13 PM Re: Challenge for you [Re: lori32wf]
Ravenwood Ravenwood member Registered: 11/11/08 Posts: 170	People will ALWAYS take a written piece and make it into something they understand. No matter what you write about, if it's coded or not, they're going to relate it to themselves. That's a GOOD thing LOL How wise you are. Orson Scott Card, writer and writing-teacher, related that in one book, he (deliberately) did not describe physically the heroine, per se. When the publisher and agent (both female) pointed this out, he asked each, separately, to describe the heroine-- they having read the manuscript. Both described themselves. This quality of writing (which I only wish I could master) endears itself to the reader. Lori, I have not disregarded your assignment. I tried to do something three or four times. Jeepers, this thing takes some soul-searching, doesn't it? If I do reply, it will probably be in prose, I already tried (and failed miserably) to answer with poetry. The delete bin has overflowed.
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#21194 - 01/21/11 07:28 PM Re: Challenge for you [Re: Sorcerer]
Ravenwood Ravenwood member Registered: 11/11/08 Posts: 170	Sorcerer, your poem above is quite well written, in my opinion. Written well for poetry? I will leave that answer to those who know of such. I am not in that elite group. All I know is that the reader understands what you are revealing. Is that not the goal for writing of any genre? Thank you for participating in Lori's assignment.
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#21195 - 01/23/11 07:58 AM Re: Challenge for you [Re: Ravenwood]
lori32wf lori32wf addict Registered: 11/18/02 Posts: 465 Loc: Louisiana	I think Mr. Card was on to something. What better form of flattery for a writer than to have the reader take on ANY character as their own? I haven't thought anyone disregarded the challenge. I figured they have been busy LOL. Plus, it may not be for everyone. It IS a difficult one, and you DO have to do a lot of soul searching. And I didn't mean you had to write a poem. That's why I included that you write something in your own genre. Kelly taught me something a long time ago that goes more with this. He said, I'm paraphrasing, that it didn't matter in the style of writing I did. What mattered was HOW I wrote. For the life of me I can't be descriptive enough to physically describe a character for a story. The old adage is you show the story instead of telling it. That's why I changed over to poetry. It's easier for me. I don't have to describe a character for someone to feel the story. All I have to do is touch the heart of the reader. I have another friend who used to say I laid myself naked on a page with everything I write. There's a LOT of truth in that. I'm an emotional based person LOL. Every day of my life I feel something strongly. When I do, and I'm inspired to write about it, I put everything I am into a piece. Why? Because I've never been considered normal. Only when I write do I feel that way. Why? Because when I get a response from someone saying they've felt that way about their own life I see I'm as normal as the next person LOL. It doesn't matter what kind of writer you are. What matters is that you show the story well enough for it to reach out and grab the person who's reading it. IF you can do that, which Ravenwood you SO can LOL, that is when you know whatever genre you are writing in is the one for you. For those who take on this challenge the lesson IS to soul-search. To figure out we are ALL normal in our own unique way. Doesn't matter if you write a poem, or an entire story. That's up to you. What matters is you look inside yourself and forgive yourself for whatever is haunting you. _________________________ I don't write my dreams or nightmares. I write my own reality.
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