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#36614 - 09/01/08 05:04 AM Sins I have commited
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and vow never to do again.

Not adding enough description (saying 'The reader can use their imagination to fill in the blanks' doesn't cut it).

Suspending the readers' disbelief and then sending it crashing to the ground by adding something so far-fetched that it makes the story totally unbelievable.

Not drawing enough on my own real-life experiences and where I live.

Using 'est as in 'greatest', 'best ever', or using 'unbelievable' or anything like that unless I can actually show it was the 'greatest', 'best ever', 'unbelievable' etc ...
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#36648 - 09/02/08 04:44 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: DarkHorse]
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... and probably will again.

Putting in too much detail, and leaving nothing to the reader's imagination.

Drawing too much on my own (boring) life experiences instead of spicing things up.
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#36651 - 09/02/08 08:43 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: CharmBrights]
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Over -ly ing. Quickly, slowly, forcefully, viciously. Something I try to avoid now.

Getting lost in minutae, I'm a bugger for that. Try to go back and remove it but sometimes it's nice to prattle on about somebody's left leg for a paragraph, or the colour of the carpet, or whatever.
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#36676 - 09/04/08 04:34 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: Ic1]
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 Originally Posted By: Ic1
Over -ly ing. Quickly, slowly, forcefully, viciously. Something I try to avoid now. ...
Many years ago there was a character in boys' fiction called Tom Swiftly whe NEVER did anything without an adverb. For example:
"I have no money," said Tom brokenly.

 Originally Posted By: Ic1
... Getting lost in minutae, ... but sometimes it's nice to prattle on about somebody's left leg for a paragraph, or the colour of the carpet, or whatever.
Charles Dickens did a lot of that (e.g. the inn sign in Pickwick Papers) and it never did him any harm.
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#36718 - 09/05/08 06:17 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: CharmBrights]
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There's even a name for it - the "Tom Swiftie" where the adverb conveys the punch line.

eg "I need some pizza now," he said crustily.
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#36755 - 09/07/08 11:17 PM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: CharmBrights]
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 Originally Posted By: CharmBrights
{snip}
 Originally Posted By: Ic1
... Getting lost in minutae, ... but sometimes it's nice to prattle on about somebody's left leg for a paragraph, or the colour of the carpet, or whatever.
Charles Dickens did a lot of that (e.g. the inn sign in Pickwick Papers) and it never did him any harm.


Ahh, but he had an excuse - he was being paid by the word!
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#36874 - 09/16/08 02:05 PM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: Anonymous]
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Re. Charles Dickens
Also - he wasn't writing porn! Pity, because he had such a perfect name for it LOL

I have become committed to the concept of "tight writing" for porn. Anything which isn't ESSENTIAL to the story-line, atmosphere, and character descriptions is out. When you are in the middle of fore-play, you don't go for cup of coffee ( now you know where you are going wrong!) So why bog down a porn story by a description of the sunset? I aim to keep the arousal building in my stories and if they get labelled "stroke stories", then I have succeeded - hopefully \:\(
Jill
Author name Jillbaby
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#36904 - 09/17/08 02:39 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: jillerotica]
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 Originally Posted By: Anonymous
 Originally Posted By: CharmBrights
{snip}
 Originally Posted By: Ic1
... Getting lost in minutae, ... but sometimes it's nice to prattle on about somebody's left leg for a paragraph, or the colour of the carpet, or whatever.
Charles Dickens did a lot of that (e.g. the inn sign in Pickwick Papers) and it never did him any harm.


Ahh, but he had an excuse - he was being paid by the word!
And so do most professional writers. The cover price of my books depends on the length!

 Originally Posted By: jillerotica
Re. Charles Dickens
Also - he wasn't writing porn! Pity, because he had such a perfect name for it LOL

I have become committed to the concept of "tight writing" for porn. Anything which isn't ESSENTIAL to the story-line, atmosphere, and character descriptions is out. When you are in the middle of fore-play, you don't go for cup of coffee ( now you know where you are going wrong!) So why bog down a porn story by a description of the sunset? I aim to keep the arousal building in my stories and if they get labelled "stroke stories", then I have succeeded - hopefully
Again, stroke stories are not usually successful novels, and the author quickly gets a reputation for writing boringly repetitive books.
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#36911 - 09/17/08 08:00 AM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: CharmBrights]
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Good point CharmBrights.
Unfortunately some would-be stroke-stories are so boring that you need to get up for a coffee half-way through to stay awake LOL
Some authors should have the words: "Cut to the chase" pinned to their PC.:)
Jill x
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#37342 - 10/02/08 09:35 PM Re: Sins I have commited [Re: jillerotica]
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Jill
I would agree that alot of people on this site like stroke stories. I would say there is a time and place for a romantic story with sex on this site. It makes more sense to a wider audience of males and females. Also it is fun to have variety. Plus you are one hell of a stroke story teller. I think I am somewhere in between. I hope to keep getting better though. LOL

Ryan
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